I have sections of a fanfic written but I wanted everyones opinion on the plot before I put more work into it and post it. The Cullens play secondary characters in this although they are very involved. It's told from both Audrey(the main character) and Bella's points of view.
Title: In Dusk
Summary: It's been over fifteen years since Bella Cullen left behind her humanity to join Edward and the rest of the Cullen clan in immortality, but it came with a price. As Bella struggles with her inner demons she meets eighteen year old Audrey Brennan, who until recently had been sheltered from everything by her overprotected mother. Abnormally keen to people's emotions Audrey had come to live vicariously through the strange Cullen family that lived in the woods of her Oregon home and the love she felt radiating from Bella and Edward. Drawn to them for an unknown reason, Audrey finally finds out the deep dark secret that lurked inside of her and must chose which life to live, as Bella has to cope with her choice and the sacrifices she made for love.
Excerpt #1 (Audrey's POV):
Bella was already sitting outside when I walked up to the Cullen’s house. She rose slowly as I got to the bottom of the steps.
“Do you know I look the same now as I did when I was fourteen?” The question was random but the only thing going through my mind at that particular moment. I looked up at the gorgeous girl. Her raven hair was loose and fell across her shoulders, and to my surprise her pale skin sparkled whenever the light hit it. She looked like an angel. My angel.
Bella still said nothing and I couldn’t read her. I never could.
“I’m one of you aren’t I?” The porch was spinning around me and my heart was pounding so loudly I couldn’t think straight. I was afraid to hear her answer but I burned for the truth at the same time.
Bella closed her eyes and let out a deep breath as if she had been holding it forever. “Yes.”
My knees felt weak and everything got hazy. The porch lights began to dim as I heard Bella’s voice in the distance call for Edward.
I was a vampire.
Excerpt #2 (Bella's POV):
I love books. I love their smell. I love the feeling of their aging pages. Aging. That is something that doesn't exist to me anymore. I was not quite nineteen years old but have been on this earth for thirty-five. It was still new to me, even sixteen years later, waking up in the same skin every morning, down the hall from my daughter who looks like my sister. This is the life I chose, I tell myself. I chose an eternity with Edward and with that immortality that had to be hidden from humanity, including my family, who has long since stopped looking for me. I still go to Forks in secret, mainly because Edward would not approve. I feel like a thief sneaking around in the night, but I don’t know who would still recognize me, or at least my teenage self. I go to Charlie's house and watch him as Edward did with me so many years ago. A part of me will always hurt knowing that my need to disappear hurt him, although he never questioned me.