Jazz Girl wrote:I haven't seen this one mentioned here just yet, but I have become quite enamoured of If Love Could Light A Candle which is written by AG's beta Pastiche Pen. An interesting twist on the story. It is kind of canon, but kind of not. Rather than a high school student, Edward is playing the role of a therapist whom Bella begins to see because of her reserved nature and difficulty adjusting to life in Forks. It jumps back and forth between Edward & Bella's present and Edward's vigilante days. 7 very long chapters thus far, updating about every week or so. Very well written and loving seeing badarse Edward during his days hunting humans. A really interesting paradox.
EDIT: And to whomever recommended Tropic of Virgo Holy Hell and thank you very much. I am not even through chapter 3 and I am loving the Would you PLEASE stop trying to get round the filters? out of it!! Win after bloody fracking win!!!!! I know, apparently, it gets a little angsty by the time I get current. But, mother of gods, she is a genius.!!!!
SweetKay wrote:missp: I very much enjoyed your first chapter. I too found it confusing when the person or thoughts changed. I have seen other authors just do something as simple as putting in a line, ________________ within a chapter when that occurs. I think that would help. Keep writing and keep updating.
missp: I love your writing style! It's hard to read another version of Renesmee (btw you put Renessmee but there is only one s) because everyone sees her so differently. I would suggest making more paragraphs when writing. Every time the person speaking changes that should be a new line. I had a read a few lines over again because I hadn't realized someone else was now talking. Keep up the good work!♥ Amanda Beth ♥
Ooooh! Great job! I like it a lot! It fits so easily into SM's writing style and I love how you summarized the BD Volturi scene, and even followed up on some secondary characters. EXCELLENT!! Can't wait for Ch. 2!
p.s. I was a little concerned at first when Jacob needed to talk to Nessie (i.e. how could that work? he wouldn't be able to do that). But, once he explained to her what it was...it made perfect sense...of course he needs to do that! DUH!
missp wrote: I found out today that my 13 year old Pomeranian, Bridget, has cancer all over her body. I have to put her down, and I am not doing so well with the news.
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