you will so have to move here
id seriously like start crying from being so happy if he started talking to me again
well ive already got sarah coming up here to say that i am amazing over the loudspeakers, so sure! come right on over and teach him a lesson!
danggg, thats colddd, its been like low positive twenties for us =/
id hate that walk, poor you = (
in the first sentence of that, i think its a little easier to say 'established on February 14, 1912,' (make sure you put the comma before AND after the year, if im remembering correctly)
dont forget to put an apostrophe in Arizona's
agreed with the mining thing
'The state makes UP about half of the USA's copper industry.' (you dont need 'the' before usa necessarily, but you might even wanna write out united states of america in some spots, depending on how hard your teacher grades on conventions)
'There are a total of 90 cities in Arizona. The biggest are Tucson,....and Phoenix, which is the capital.'
wait, are you presenting this? or typing this up as like an essay?
youd wanna put a comma after "Ditat Deus"(,)
try to avoid contractions in essays (like it's and don't and can't)
'6, 5- 30 km wide' <- i am very confused by this
the colorado river isnt cutting through the grand canyon much anymore, and we are pretty sure that the river or a glacier cut the grand canyon itself, you seem to be a little too 'we dont know' =/
'and more than one and a half million people live there' makes a little more sense in that last paragraph, although im a little concerned about it as youve already stated that first sentence
where you talk about the percent of sun, im not quite sure i get it or how to word it....
i hope i dont sound too pushy with my edits, i tend to be really picky when editing as im a writer myself and hate to screw things up
no problemo what?
@the whole tim subject
you know what, im seriously considering just giving up on him, if he wants to talk to me 5 days a year, whatever, im just really tired of this =/